Can you guys criuqe me on my website? I need feedback and dont hold back any punches.
www.cnktech.net
www.cnktech.net
Can you guys please review and give feedback on my website?
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16k_zx81
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your logo is pixellated - needs attention
I would change "loaner" in the wording to "loan machine" - this may be a regional thing, but the slang does not come off well in my reading of it
particularly this paragraph
attend to this paragraph
A couple of points are unclear. It reads as though parts will be required - it should be clear that they may not. "we will provide if not provided" is unclear.
Second to last sentence is grammatically incorrect.
"although" not ideal to start a sentence.
would remove the caps from this paragraph
..
add more calls to action
'percolated'?.
'alike' is not an ideal start to the sentence.
... actually reading through 'remote services' page - to be frank there's a lot of verbiage there.
Your customer wants to see two things: what they 'get' out of it, and how much it costs. The more wording they have to get through to find this information, the more chance you have of losing them.
5 second rule. Quick to convert. These are your objectives in web ad copy.
Calls to action.
I would change "loaner" in the wording to "loan machine" - this may be a regional thing, but the slang does not come off well in my reading of it
particularly this paragraph
attend to this paragraph
A couple of points are unclear. It reads as though parts will be required - it should be clear that they may not. "we will provide if not provided" is unclear.
Second to last sentence is grammatically incorrect.
"although" not ideal to start a sentence.
would remove the caps from this paragraph
..
add more calls to action
'percolated'?.
'alike' is not an ideal start to the sentence.
... actually reading through 'remote services' page - to be frank there's a lot of verbiage there.
Your customer wants to see two things: what they 'get' out of it, and how much it costs. The more wording they have to get through to find this information, the more chance you have of losing them.
5 second rule. Quick to convert. These are your objectives in web ad copy.
Calls to action.
Freedom PC Solutions
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Under comments
I would change (Company founded in 2008) to Our company was founded in 2008
(Check out below the various services we offer for your computer needs.)
I would change to Listed below are the various services we offer for your computer needs.
(We are the one and only computer alchemist! Welcome.) Sounds a little cheasy to me, I would change it to Welcome to computer alchemist.
Under services you did pretty much the same thing I did. Some people don't like to read through a bunch a stuff and will leave if they don't get the info quickly. I have mine setup like yours but will be adding a simple list of services and prices at the top for those who want it now and don't want to read through the descriptions.
I don't know what you are trying to say with "CnK Technologies® is a more community and small business computer repair business."
I would change "We specialize in desktop support, laptop and desktop repair and various other services such as data backup, data recovery, onsite service and remote service." to "We specialize in the repair and support of laptops and desktops. We also offer services such as data backup, data recovery, as well as onsite and remote service."
I also agree that the logo needs to be cleaned up. It has the jaggies. There is more to fix in the Services section that I will get back to you later on.
Oh
Your home page and comments page are the same. I would eliminate the comments link in your menu.
I would change (Company founded in 2008) to Our company was founded in 2008
(Check out below the various services we offer for your computer needs.)
I would change to Listed below are the various services we offer for your computer needs.
(We are the one and only computer alchemist! Welcome.) Sounds a little cheasy to me, I would change it to Welcome to computer alchemist.
Under services you did pretty much the same thing I did. Some people don't like to read through a bunch a stuff and will leave if they don't get the info quickly. I have mine setup like yours but will be adding a simple list of services and prices at the top for those who want it now and don't want to read through the descriptions.
I don't know what you are trying to say with "CnK Technologies® is a more community and small business computer repair business."
I would change "We specialize in desktop support, laptop and desktop repair and various other services such as data backup, data recovery, onsite service and remote service." to "We specialize in the repair and support of laptops and desktops. We also offer services such as data backup, data recovery, as well as onsite and remote service."
I also agree that the logo needs to be cleaned up. It has the jaggies. There is more to fix in the Services section that I will get back to you later on.
Oh
Your home page and comments page are the same. I would eliminate the comments link in your menu.
Xander
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Your remote page doesn't guide people through very well. You say what you can provide, that their CC info is safe and then... a random Paypal box and TV link? It doesn't tell them anything about whether or not they need to preschedule or call or ... anything.
Move the Terms of Use next to the other stuff, or move it to the bottom.
Your first link in the Nav Bar leads to a blank page. That's where Home is usually located and you can bet the some people will click that to go back. Taking them to a blank page and/or an unexpected page might be to your benefit.
Move the Terms of Use next to the other stuff, or move it to the bottom.
Your first link in the Nav Bar leads to a blank page. That's where Home is usually located and you can bet the some people will click that to go back. Taking them to a blank page and/or an unexpected page might be to your benefit.
1aComputerServices
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I had to double check the meaning of the word Alchemist because I had it mixed up in my brain with Magician. 
Your site works for me, fix that grammer.
Your site works for me, fix that grammer.
Grammer wasn't my strongest strengths when writting it down, but i will for sure try my best. Again, thanks guys for all the help. This is the best thing you could ever give someone.
Tony_Scarpelli
Rest In Peace Tony
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Nice, very good first try. I like it.
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